ENG274 Blog Assignment # 6- Authors Note on Writing About a Place

 I wasn’t able t o post a hundreds words from my assignment on a place but this blog assignment has enough information to know what  I’m talking about.  Something you might need to know in order to understand the piece is that Made Event is a company that hosts all kind of electronic, house, trance, and techno music. They hold events all year round in different locations like Pacha, Cielo, Roseland Ballroom and many other clubs, as well as Randall's Island which is where Electric Zoo takes place. Another thing the reader needs to know is that I’m describing the event (Electric Zoo) that took place in Randall's Island, not the island itself. The island is transformed into a wonderful stage for two days.

When writing the description of Electric Zoo I had Angela's Ashes in mind. I liked the style of writing of this particular author because she wrote a wonderful story without the use if hard words using simple short sentences she described the family’s life style, home, and personalities really well. I wanted to be able to use simple words and still make my description of Electric Zoo powerful.

When I revise this piece for the final portfolio I would like to add the experience of listening to a whole DJ set inside the tent with my friends. Since this assignment was supposed to be a description of a place I limited myself to describing the setting. For my revision I would like to get into more detail about the event, the DJ's, the music and all the fun a person can have if they actually go to the event.

Something I learned from writing this piece is that it is very hard to put what you see in writing so that your reader visualizes what you see. I felt I had to include myself in the story to be able to guide the reader through the event. Another thing I learned was how to break up my thoughts into two sentence instead of having run-ons. I found myself writing really long sentences trying to describe something, at the writing center we broke the sentences down. Once long sentences were broken down they were structured better and clearer for the reader to understand.

When I begin to write stories I usually brainstorm in paper and pen. I did my first draft on the go on my cell phone during my commute on the train. I let it sit for a day then revise it on a computer. Then I go to the writing center to get help with my grammar and sentence structure.  Finally I revise it one more time, print it and have my boyfriend read it to see if the story is clear. It always help that someone reads it because I can clear up whatever he didn’t understand or is confused about.